Dragon World (Narrative Writing)

This is what I wrote recent when I did my narrative writing

One day it was 3:40 Saturday evening there were 3 named Kohatu, Jezakaia and Zane were going to a place called Dragon world with real dragons. When they left they stepped into the dragon world they already were scared because they could hear dragons roaring so they paid to go in then the instructor gave each one of them a dragon the dragons were called Devontae, Leonidas and paschal. When they were walking their dragons to the playing room their dragons flew away and that was a big problem. The dragon was flying so high that the instructor couldn't even see them. So when the dragon was flying Jezakaia, Zane and kohatu were slipping off their dragons and crying as loud as they could.

When they were slipping, Kohatu and Jezakaia and Zane were telling each other that if one of us survives, tell my family I love them. Suddenly they all slipped, they were screaming, they thought they were gonna die. But when they were falling the inspector came beneath them and caught them with his dragon and that's what saved Jezakaia, Kohatu and Zane the inspector told the dragon to take them to land the dragon went and flew fast as and once they were on land Kohatu, Jezakaia and Zane was crying and saying thank you at the same time.  

So when they were walking home they were still crying because they didn't even have the chance to sit on the dragon and the other reason is because they will be grounded. but after all that they will never go back again. They told their parents and they were grounded for 2 weeks because they could have died.